Introduction In this assignment, you will revise some messages to make them more clear and diplomatic. This assignment draws on the coursework of lessons 3 to 5 If you intend to complete this course on a four-month schedule, you should: Start this assignment at the end of Lesson 4, and Submit this assignment to your Open Learning Faculty Member by the end of Lesson 6. The Suggested Schedule recommends assignment submission dates to help you pace yourself through the course, but these dates are not absolute. Read through the whole assignment and marking guidelines before starting. Instructions Save the following document to your computer: Assignment 3 Student Worksheet Open the worksheet and follow its instructions. Save frequently. Email your work in progress to a friend or make other backups that would survive a computer failure. Submitting Your Assignment Check that the document is named [Your Last Name]_[Your First Name]_CMNS1291_Assignment3_StudentWorksheet.doc. Ensure that your name, your email address, and the date appear in your assignment worksheet itself, right at the beginning. Reread all the assignment instructions to make sure you have not missed any requirements. Compare your document to the marking guidelines. How do you think you have done? Read over your document one last time to catch any last mistakes. Submit your assignment. See How to Submit your Assignment if you need help with Moodle's submission tool. Assignment 3 Marking Guidelines Your Open Learning Faculty Member will calculate your grade by finding the best match for your performance in each category below. Part One (10 marks, 2 marks per question) 2 The revision successfully fulfills the request. 1 The revision shows that you understand the request, but more revision was needed to finish the job. 0 The changes do not demonstrate that you understand the requested revision. Part Two (30 marks, 3 marks per question) Identifying the problem 1 You correctly and specifically identify the problem, using terms from the textbook. 0 You do not correctly identify the specific problem. Revising the sentence 2 The revision successfully fixes the problem. 1 The revision shows that you understand what needs to be done, but more revision was needed to fix the problem fully. You may have introduced new problems. 0 The sentence still needs considerable revision. Part Three (10 marks, 2 marks per question) 2 The revision makes the message clear, concise, readable, and up-to-date without changing its meaning. 1 More revision is needed to fix the problem fully. You may have introduced new problems. 0 The message still needs considerable revision. Part Four (20 marks) Content (7 marks) 7 The email explains the difference between the passive and active voices, when to use them, and why writers should care about using the right voice. The examples are illuminating. 5 The email would help readers distinguish between the passive and active voice, but they still may have questions about why it matters or when to use each voice. 3 The email contains some errors about the passive and active voice. It may not include any examples. 0 The email does not demonstrate understanding of the passive and active voice. Clarity (4 marks) 4 The email is clear, concise, and well organized. It avoids jargon and stuffy phrases. 3 The email is clear in most places. Some sentences could be put more plainly. 2 The email is disorganized. The writing is wordy or hard to understand in many places. 1 The email needs significant reorganization. Major points should be in a different order. Subpoints and explanations are grouped arbitrarily. Important information is missing. 0 The email is incoherent. Tone (3 marks) 3 The email is supportive and encouraging. It focuses on the needs of its audience. 2 The tone is neutral. 1 The email is condescending or haughty. It focuses primarily on your needs. 0 The email is insulting or domineering. Originality (3 marks) 3 The email is original and inventive. The examples and reasoning are fresh. 2 The email relies heavily on the examples and reasoning in the textbook or another source. 1 The email quotes or closely paraphrases someone else’s work and credits the source. Although this is usually permissible, the assignment instructions asked that you use your own words. 0 The email includes other people’s writing without crediting the source. The assignment does not meet the requirements of academic honesty and may lead to further sanctions. Spelling, grammar, punctuation, and formatting (3 marks) 3 The email uses correct spelling, grammar, punctuation, and formatting. 2 The email has at least two significant spelling, grammar, punctuation, or formatting errors that could be embarrassing or obscure your meaning. 1 The email has many significant spelling, grammar, punctuation, or formatting errors. You may want to ask a colleague to proofread your work before submitting it. 0 The mechanics of this message do not meet the minimum standard required for this course. Part Five (30 marks) Clarity (10 marks) 10 The memo’s language is clear, concise, and readable. It avoids unnecessary words, stuffy phrases, jargon, and the passive voice. 8 Most of the memo’s language is clear, concise, and readable. Some sentences could be put more plainly. 6 Some sentences were improved, but many others remain wordy or confusing. 4 The entire memo feels opaque, wordy, or bureaucratic. 2 The memo is significantly harder to read than the original. Organization (10 marks) 10 The main idea is obvious. The points are arranged in an order that serves the message’s purpose and your audience’s needs. You support the major points with subpoints and evidence. 8 Your audience would quickly find what they need to know. Shifting a few points around would improve the message. 6 The memo takes too long to get to the point. Some points are introduced in the wrong order. 4 Your audience might have trouble following your message or understanding its importance. The memo takes much too long to get to the point. Unrelated ideas are grouped together. 2 The memo needs significant reorganization. Major points should be in a different order. Subpoints and evidence are grouped arbitrarily. Important information is missing. Scope (6 marks) 6 The memo includes the information the audience would need and no more. 4 The memo includes some information that could have been left out. The memo omits a piece of useful information. 2 The memo includes enough unnecessary information to irritate the reader. The memo omits important information. 0 You have not changed the scope. Spelling, grammar, punctuation, and formatting (4 marks) 4 The memo uses correct spelling, grammar, punctuation, and formatting. 3 The memo has a few minor spelling, grammar, punctuation, or formatting errors. 2 The memo has at least two significant spelling, grammar, punctuation, or formatting errors that could be embarrassing or obscure your meaning. 1 The memo has many significant spelling, grammar, punctuation, or formatting errors. You may want to ask a colleague to proofread your work before submitting it. 0 The mechanics of this message do not meet the minimum standard required for this course.